So with this month’s attempts at the 30-word Blogshorts stories, I’ve been a Friday Drabble slacker. Recall the drabble is like a blogshort, only longer, it’s 100 words exactly. I had a little time today to try an experiment – the same idea crafted into both forms.
The bushes shielded the coyote from view as she surveyed the house from the hillside. She watched with fascination as that other padded through its lighted interiors.
Even from here, she caught the aromas of many different foods from inside and yet that other didn’t even try to feed. That other just followed the humans around, up flights of stairs and from one room to the other, content. That other didn’t roam, didn’t hunt, didn’t kill. It let the humans touch her.
As the coyote turned to slink back to her hollowed out den, she pitied that other – that dog.
Fascinated, the coyote watched that other inside the house – it didn’t roam, hunt, or kill – content where it was, touched by humans.
Turning away, she pitied that other – that dog.
Do you think one works better than the other? Or do they both have their own merits?