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Prison
The alarm sounded as it did every morning. The window cast its grey pre-dawn light, only the time of year changing it from black to grey to black again.
He rose, participating in the daily routine. Breakfast and then to the tasks assigned to him. He got a midday break, and they told him to get some sun, maybe some exercise. It would be good for him. He sat quietly and went back to his assignments. They shook their heads.
Later, at home, her absence scoured his dinner of taste and he fell into bed consumed with the same regret.
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Oh man, dark and powerful. Great one, Steve.
Thanks, I’d had the idea for a bit and it came together pretty well.
I agree with Ross, very powerful. I think it is awesome when you can conjure such an image with so few words.
Thanks, Ladywise! I’ve been told that I should work on happier imagery, but I was pretty happy with this one…
“Happy” just doesn’t work as well in the short-form – or so it seems to me. Odd, bizarre, dark … those work better. I think it’s because it seems that for something so short to be interesting there has to be a ‘hook.’
I don’t think you get the powerful emotions out of happier stuff that you get out of something like this. I don’t write much happy stuff myself. If I’m going to write, I’m usually taken to that place by something sad and I’m looking for that powerful piece.
That was really good, and I mean really good.
Thanks, Budd! I appreciate that!
And so went another day, eh?
That’s sort of what I was going for, so good! :)
This one was really good. You got the knack, Mister!
Gracias! I had the idea earlier in the week and was happy with the way it came together.
You should look fr happier inspirations :) But I do like it. All that sadness must be very heavy.